By Hadia Piracha
come hither,come hither
i said to the bird
but it kept moving steadily away
smell sweet! sweet being!
i pleaded to the rose
but its scent just kept fading away
taste good! oh scrumptiuos meal!
i wished for the food
but its flavour got worse than cardboard
sing! shower me with a heavenly voice!
i requested to the mockingbird
but it was too melancholy and would not do
stay afloat! stay afloat!
i prayed for the wrecked boat
but the tide grew wilder,rougher,i kept sinking
move faster,oh please do!
i begged to the crawling snail
but it was grievous time,it kept getting slower
release me chordS! u wretched invention!
i said to the cage
but it was alive,scathing,it kept binding me tighter
give me some power! just a little bit!
i begged,pleaded,desired from them
but the torture kept increasing
do return home!oh delicious feeling!
of love,freedom,ecstacy,return
instead it kept goin further and further away.....
my life,my angels,stay not parted from me
my heart screamed out to them
they had stopped caring,i didnt matter anymore
trapped in a formidable cage,separated from my loved ones
they knew not my life without them was empty
they simply moved on,for they too were in danger of jeopardy...
i said to the bird
but it kept moving steadily away
smell sweet! sweet being!
i pleaded to the rose
but its scent just kept fading away
taste good! oh scrumptiuos meal!
i wished for the food
but its flavour got worse than cardboard
sing! shower me with a heavenly voice!
i requested to the mockingbird
but it was too melancholy and would not do
stay afloat! stay afloat!
i prayed for the wrecked boat
but the tide grew wilder,rougher,i kept sinking
move faster,oh please do!
i begged to the crawling snail
but it was grievous time,it kept getting slower
release me chordS! u wretched invention!
i said to the cage
but it was alive,scathing,it kept binding me tighter
give me some power! just a little bit!
i begged,pleaded,desired from them
but the torture kept increasing
do return home!oh delicious feeling!
of love,freedom,ecstacy,return
instead it kept goin further and further away.....
my life,my angels,stay not parted from me
my heart screamed out to them
they had stopped caring,i didnt matter anymore
trapped in a formidable cage,separated from my loved ones
they knew not my life without them was empty
they simply moved on,for they too were in danger of jeopardy...
7 comments:
You wrote this amazingly well - the beginning itself was brillant. It got the reader immediatly hooked. The ending was a little dissapointing - there was too much repetetion in it.
thanks pooja! and good point...but the last two stanzas kinda go together.........
I like this. I wish I could write poetry this well, too. :)
The concept, metaphors and imagery are fantastic.
thank u! :)
amazingly written :)
I loved this!
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